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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Many
people
 are wondering about the
history
 of the place where they live day after day.
This
 essay will examine the causes of
this
 situation and how can
people
 reach the
history
 of the buildings. After a lot of earthquakes happened
people
 started to worry about the
history
 of the buildings they live in. To search the
history
 and the plan of the houses would feel better since they know when the building was built. The only thought they have is to be sure if their
house
 is resistant to the earthquake’s disruptive effects.
For example
, a building
that is
 younger than 50 years and built correctly
according to
 plan means a safe place to live for engineers and
according to
last
 surveys. Some possible solutions to research the
history
 of the building are trying to find the engineers who took part in the building process of the
house
 and communicate with the building owner. They can learn from them about the place whether it is safe to live or not knowing the age of the building and the other information about the
house
.
For instance
, when we were worrying about the same problem, me and my parents reached for the owner’s phone number on the build permit paper and we asked all the questions what we were curious about our
house
.
To conclude
,
people
 are getting curious about the
history
 of the houses they live in because of the fear of the earthquake's massive effects. They can find the
history
 of the building and get rid of the fear they have.
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introduction conclusion present
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supported main points
Ensure main points are supported with clearer and more specific examples. Currently, the examples provided are somewhat general.
logical structure
Use transitional phrases and connectors more effectively to ensure smooth flow between ideas and paragraphs.
complete response
You have addressed the task well by discussing both the reasons why people are interested in the history of their homes and how they can research it.
clear comprehensive ideas
Your ideas are generally clear and understandable, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.
relevant specific examples
You have provided relevant examples to support your points, such as your personal experience with contacting the building owner.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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