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Schools should do more to teach students about their health and wellbeing. Do you agree or disagree?

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It has been a debate whether the learning institution or the home
are
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is
 responsible to teach youngsters about healthy lifestyles. Undoubtedly, both of these institutes have their own role to play, but in my opinion, pupils should
be provided
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be provided with knowledge
knowledge
 about their health through their teachers rather than parents. Most importantly, the
knowledge
 of wellbeing in children in their primary level education helps towards
prosperity
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the prosperity
 of the
country
.
That is
 to say, if the young ones acquire
knowledge
 about fitness in their early
age
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age, then
then
this
 could help them live longer, which in turn, allow them to serve their
country
 to strengthen its economy by making contributions
such
 as paying
tax
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taxes
.
Moreover
, the healthy people are
also
 very efficient and effective while performing in every
sector
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sector, such
such
 that it becomes a competitive advantage for a
country
.
Moreover
, people develop most of their habit
in
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with
young
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younger
 age. It is known that a person could not change his behaviour very easily which he already habituates himself while he was a child.
For instance
, Sigmund Freud said that an adult’s habit would be shaped from the time he was born and the guidance he gets in his childhood plays a vital role to determine his adulthood.
Therefore
, it is very important for primary institutes to provide enough
knowledge
 about healthiness to their young scholars. In conclusion, I believe schools should
also
 focus
in
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on
 providing education related to hygiene and fitness to their students apart from regular courses because not only
this
 could help towards
provision
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the provision
 of
healthy
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health
 workforce to the
country
 but
also people develop
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people also develop
 many of their habits in their youth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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