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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
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Some people say that the pupils obtaining their tertiary education are liable
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for
 all their fees because it aids only them, but not their community.
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, I totally disagree with
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 perspective and believe that the people who have higher academic qualifications are extremely vital to their society. Primarily, the aspirant scholars are very helpful for the development of the nation.
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, the knowledge that these people acquire through their educational career could be very helpful in every sector they employ themselves.
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, these productive areas in the long term
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become
 very valuable to the nation by being profitable.
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, the economy of
Scandinavian countries
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the Scandinavian countries
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is
 extraordinary because they provide full scholarship to all their students and in return they use their hard earned skills in the field where they work. Another factor that these students provide benefit to the society is by their ability to provide more educated offspring. The primary inspiration of many children
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has been
 always their parents and if their guardian is educated
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 could motivate them to follow
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the same path
 as their caretakers. Eventually, if more people go to college for academically higher qualifications
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 obviously there will be more learned scholars to help the surroundings that they live. In conclusion, I believe that the people seeking a degree from colleges should not be held accountable for all their fees because they are very crucial for the prosperity of the country they stay, and they
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 help society by providing them more highly educated future generations.
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