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However, some people think that the present time is more important. How important is it for individuals and the country to think and do something for the future? What is your own opinion?

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Planet earth
Suggestion
The planet earth
 is filled with love, sorrows, sufferings, thrilling moments and adventures and so on. With the passage of the
time
, we are falling deep into our own world and have stopped thinking about our
future
 and generations to follow. Few people believe that our present is of vital significance, others,
however
, argue that we should focus more on our
future
.
This
 essay will analyse both views before presenting an opinion. Without any doubt, our present is very important as things we plan, decisions we make and
measures
Suggestion
the measures
 we take now have long-term benefits to our
future
 generations. People believe that one should
do
engage in
make
 efforts to make the present
time
 better and people should not worry about the
future
 which no can predict to perfection. Efforts should be made to utilise the current
time
 for the betterment of individuals and society as a whole. Moral lessons and virtuous deeds taught today will make our children valuable citizens in
future
.
Moreover
, the present
time
 quickly becomes the past and will not be repeated. People sometimes regret not enjoying a particular moment or even more as they were busy or distracted by other things at that
time
.
On the contrary
, few people believe that we should plan for our
future
 as it is vital for our survival. Proponents of
this
 viewpoint say that we should define policies and regulations to bring improvement to our core
system including
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system, including
 transportation, power distribution, air travel, housing and so on. These improvements will have significant value in
future
Suggestion
the future
.
For instance
, efforts should be made to improve the education system at the grass root level so that we have more brilliant and talents students which will our
future
 prospect. Our
future
 not only depends on the measure and steps taken at the national
level but
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level, but
 we have to think and work on an individual basis to improve our
future
. Individuals should take part in community welfare service,
for instance
, they can take the responsibility to educate a child or provide employment to poor and needy people. These actions will make them better citizens who are the
future
 of our society. To recapitulate, the aforementioned provide plausible arguments in favour of both views.
However
, in my opinion, both present and
future
 have equal importance as we reap in
future
Suggestion
the future
 what we sowed in the past.
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