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Some people consider thinking about and planning for the future to be a waste of time. They argue that people should simply live in the moment. Do you agree or disagree? Use at least one personal example in your response

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The merits behind attempts people make to guess, alter or control the
future
 are often contested. Many
counter
Suggestion
counters
 that people should make efforts to live in the moment.
However
, I feel that people ought to think regularly about the
future
 and adhere to a plan for their life and career. To illustrate
this
, the heightened probability of goal achievement and the benefit derision that occurs when one is prepared for the unknown will be
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 in
this
 essay. For one, people are much more likely to achieve their professional targets if they make plans. Education’s connection to the working world plays as a good example here. If a person plans to become a doctor, they must put into place a comprehensive plan for their education. Were they to just ‘live in the moment’, their vocational hopes would fall by the wayside and never be realized. As
this
 example shows, thinking about the
future
 is
necessary practice
Suggestion
a necessary practice
 that all people with goals should engage in.
In addition
 to
this
, regular meditation on the
future
 can help a
person
Suggestion
person's
 position themselves to benefit from upcoming changes to their lifestyle.
For instance
, before I came to China, I took the time to study the Chinese language. Because I had the
foresight
Suggestion
Foresight
 to do
this
, my transition to life in China was much smoother.
Thus
, as my personal experience makes clear, preparing oneself for the
future
 can help a person reap additional benefits that a ‘live in the moment’ mentality cannot. Following
this
 look, it is felt people who commit time to thinking about the
future
 stand to gain in ways other people do not.
Thus
, it is hoped everyone the world over commits themselves to
this
 lifestyle practice.
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