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International travel is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Nowadays, travelling abroad becomes cheaper and more nations try to attract more
vacationers
.
This
 leads to a recent argument among our community who wonders the impact of it.
Hence
, to settle the dispute, a
further
 discussion will be given below.
To begin
 with, tourists can harm the local cultures.
This
 is to say that they will bring new habits which are unsuitable for the domestic people. A typical example is Indonesia; there, it is mandatory for girls
to wear
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wear
 clothing which covers almost all of their body parts.
Nevertheless
, foreigners influence fashion styles like wearing
bikini
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bikinis
a bikini
 and crop-tops which are strongly against the domestic rule. Obviously,
vacationers
leisure time away from work devoted to rest or pleasure
vacations
 may have a negative impact towards country’s particular tradition.
On the other hand
, development owns its benefits and drawbacks. Even though rise in the number of tourists may harm the nation’s culture, local businesses will bolster.
This
 may happen since tourists will spend their money for domestic businesses,
such
 as purchasing souvenirs and eating traditional dishes.
Subsequently
, generating
lucrative amount
Suggestion
a lucrative amount
 of cash for them. Needless to say, having more foreigners, locals’ prosperity may surge.
Additionally
, unemployment rates may plunge as there are more
vacationers
leisure time away from work devoted to rest or pleasure
vacations
.
This
 is mainly due to more investments are made by global corporations in form of accommodation.
Consequently
, these new hotels will hire employees from the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
. Clearly, the growth of tourists will
contributes
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contribute
 to the increase of job vacancies, since there are more sites being built. To conclude, after having some points above,
although
 having more tourists may have a side effect for local cultures, the advantages from
different perspective
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a different perspective
different perspectives
 outweigh the disadvantages.
This
 is because of the increase in domestic wealth and employment rate.
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