Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In
this
modern day and age,
technology
is advancing at a rapid pace. Some people are of the opinion that people are becoming more sociable because if it while others differ from
this
opinion.
This
essay would
initially
discuss how the advancements in the
technology
are providing a better means to communicate with each other, leading to, people being more sociable and later, it would discuss how people are relying more on the
technology
and giving less importance to their social lives.
To begin
with, the means to communicate with each other are changing with the modern technical innovations. Nowadays, people can communicate with each other with the help of various different means. With an easier access to the
Interet
a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange
internet
, social media has increased
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
presence throughout the world.
For instance
, the number of users on Facebook, a social media website, increased from 1 million to 5 million in just 10 years. People can connect with each other through these social platforms, chatting and spending
time
with each other virtually.
This
has made it easier for many people to get together without actually getting out of their homes.
On the other hand
, people are becoming more lousy with the advancing
technology
. Rather than going out and spending
time
with each other, many people like to play video games on their gaming consoles or watching the television. Cafe's and
resteraunts
a building where people go to eat
restaurants
restaurant
used to be the social hubs
earlier where
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earlier, where
people would spend a quality
time
together but
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together, but
now most people order their food from online websites to their homes directly.
This
has restricted the social gatherings. In a survey conducted in the USA, it was found that 60% of the earnings of
resteraunt
a building where people go to eat
restaurant
came from food delivery. To conclude, a number of people spend their leisure
time
alone and not socialising with
others but
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others, but
in my opinion the modern
technology
has provided alternate sources to interact with each other and
hence
it has made it more convenient for people to socialise.
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