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Some people think universities should provide knowledge and skills related to a future career; others think the true function of a university is to give access to knowledge for its own sake. What is your opinion of the main function of university?

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Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the aims of educational institutions. These purposes should be providing practical and professional
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 or theoretical knowledge is a controversial issue. I agree with the view that students need to be equipped with job-related
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 for the following reasons.
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practising job-related
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 at
universities
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 can help students keep pace with occupations more quickly.
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 is because they have already known and performed the basic steps of a certain job, and the only thing that they have to do is apply flexibly to their current professionals. So, the repetitions of professional
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 not only motivate productivity but
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 curtail training time.
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, having qualified students through a thorough training curriculum may bring considerable reputations to
universities
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 themselves.
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, Harvard, one of the most popular
universities
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 in the world, harnesses case studies as a primary pedagogical method which allows learners to obtain knowledge and
skills
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 from practical situations. Thanks to
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 educational measure, Harvard has trained many billionaires, politicians and successful people in varied fields. It makes contributions to social progress and
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 to assert Harvard's position in the education industry.
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 not to say that
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 should not pay any attention to pure scientific research. There are, of course, some domains
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 highly theoretical learning
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 as math and philosophy. These subjects may create future scientists and scholars, who will make greater dedications to our society. But unfortunately, those people are few. In sum, it is
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necessary
 to give priority to occupational
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universities's
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curriculum
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, which will ensure providing qualified employees to the
labor
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 market and
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 accelerate economic growth. Meanwhile, we should not ignore the other important roles
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 are undertaking. Only by doing so can educational institutions maintain dynamic and sustainable development.

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Task Achievement
You should try to maintain a balanced view throughout the essay, acknowledging both sides of the argument effectively. Including counter-arguments or a wider range of perspectives could strengthen your essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve coherence, make sure each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. Transition phrases can be used more effectively to guide the reader through your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
To elevate your essay, consider a more varied vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid repetition of phrases and ensure precision in language to more effectively convey your points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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