Some people spend a lot of money on tickets to go to sporting or cultural events. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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Large amounts of
money
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are spent by certain groups of
people
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on purchasing tickets to enter sporting and cultural events. Personally, I feel
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is a positive development for society and
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essay shall outline the main reasons for
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stand point
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.
Firstly
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,
money
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spent on
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activities is a great boost for an economy. These events employ millions of
people
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across the globe and if
people
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did not attend them
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unemployment levels would increase dramatically.
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, the 2018 football
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in Russia is expected to generate over $500 million dollars in gate receipts and all of
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money
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can
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be paid out in wages to local
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who can
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use the
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to support their own families.
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, cultural and sporting activities can bring a great sense of pride and joy to a nation. Most
people
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are extremely proud of their own
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cultures, traditions and sporting achievements. These feelings can build a strong identity in a nation’s population and motivate them to lead productive and fulfilling lives in turn.
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, when England won the 2004
rugby world cup
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the ‘feel good factor’ of the nation was enormous and inspired many
people
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young and old to have a go at the sport of rugby.
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led to an improvement in the
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physical health but
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their mental health
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as they had a new outlet for the frustrations of modern
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living.
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, the combined boost to an economy and a nation’s sense of self is a very positive trend. Governments around the world should actively pursue a policy which encourages regular sporting and cultural events.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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