Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is often said that people working in entertainment are paid so much money. Many people believe that

entartainers

a person who tries to please or amuse

entertainers

should gain

this

vary

Suggestion

variable

amount of money. Others,

however

, think that there are many important profession worth to be paid like entertainers or even more. While

this

point of view has value, I believe that paying

this

giant

number

Suggestion

amount

is kind of

exaggarated

represented as greater than is true or reasonable

exaggerated

. In my opinion, professions

such

Scientistics

a person with advanced knowledge of one or more sciences

scientists

, doctors, professors and even school teachers should be paid almost same as entertainers.

Firstly

, the time and effort those people spending their

life in to prove

Suggestion

life to prove

theroeis

a well-substantiated explanation of some aspect of the natural world; an organized system of accepted knowledge that applies in a variety of circumstances to explain a specific set of phenomena

theories

and inventions to wealth and facilitate the human beings or as

doctores

a licensed medical practitioner

doctors

saving human

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

lives

life

Secondly

indevidiuals

a human being

individuals

individual

professores

the highest ranking position for a university academic

professors

and teachers worth big salaries and

this

is due to the fact that those people generate and teach our future generations which will be

one

day a step stone in countries developmental progress.

Thirdly

, there income does not reflect the amount of work they do.

For instance

, a top star movie like Anglina Jolie can easily make more than

one

million dollar by acting a

one

single film.

This

giant amount of money hard or may

be never be reached

Suggestion

never be reached

by many people in their whole life no matter how hard they are

work

Suggestion

working

On the other hand

, Many will agree with the over

pais

the ratio of the circumference to the diameter of a circle; approximately equal to 3.14159265358979323846...

pies

pass

for the stars, musicians or

athliets

a person trained to compete in sports

athletes

because of reasons related to that paying for these professions depending on how much they will profit the producer organization per minute. As well as entertainment now consider to be

one

of the main modern

manufactring

the act of making something (a product) from raw materials

manufacturing

to increase the economy. In conclusion, there is no doubt that entertainment is an important aspect in our

life but

Accept comma addition

life, but

the overrated paying for entertainers could

has

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have

positives and

negatives

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negative

aspects.

However

, in my view the negatives outweigh the positives.

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