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Illiteracy continues to be a concern for many countries in the world today. What are the causes of illiteracy in the modern world, and what effects does it have on the people concerned and on society as a whole?

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Illiteracy is a less-discussed issue in
this
 era, but one which can have depressing effects on both individuals and society. There seem to be two main causes, and a number of effects, which will be discussed here. Possibly the main cause is having parents with a little schooling background.
This
 leads to produce illiterate person, because they could not help their offsprings in reading and
thus
 studying
.
Accept space
.
Also
, a less-literate parents, means a less-used books at home and lack of reading stimulating. A
further
 well-known cause is difficult circumstances. These range from a widely-spread poverty, political turbulence to learning disabilities, especially in less affluent countries. The effects of
this
 concern on both people and state can be quite serious.
Firstly
, illiteracy may be contributed to limited ability to obtain information and understand information.
For example
, many people may not understand their health situation and take a serious action because they could not write or read.
In addition
 to,
unemployment rate
Suggestion
the unemployment rate
 has been affected by the illiteracy.
In other words
, the employment chances would be lessened in the competitive job market or even get a badly-paid work.
Secondly
, Literacy is an essential tool for
state
Suggestion
the state
a state
states
 to be competitive with all the globe.
For instance
, there would be many vacant work positions since the less-educated society's members. A long-term effect is that the literacy exacerbates the difficulty of understanding the social issues which undermines the society involvement. To conclude, a
poor
Suggestion
poorly
-educated parents and the severe surrounding conditions seem to be the main causes, and they affect both unaware individuals and the
progression
Suggestion
progress
 of the state
consequently
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy
  • Illiteracy
  • Poverty
  • Access
  • Educational resources
  • Social inequality
  • Discrimination
  • Gender disparity
  • Racial bias
  • Cultural norms
  • Technological advances
  • Political instability
  • Disruption
  • Education systems
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Job prospects
  • Health implications
  • Self-esteem
  • Empowerment
  • Economic growth
  • Social cohesion
  • Civic participation
  • Democratic processes
  • Exclusion
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