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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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It is often argued that both low and high
income
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 families struggle to access college. I completely disagree with
this
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 fact and I believe that members
from
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of
 poor families find it harder to get a higher
education
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 for various reasons.
Firstly
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, Low
income
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 families
have
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has
 various financial barriers where they can not afford a decent
education
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.
In other words
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, attending university does not only consists of covering tuition, but
also
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 paying for the hidden fees
such
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 as housing, food, books and supplies.
For instance
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, even if a
student
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 earned a scholarship from a
high
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higher
 level institution, he is obliged to find a source
for
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of
income
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 to settle the cost
whch
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
 will gradually interfere with the
student
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 performance and lose his scholarship.
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, another reason why poor students struggle
into
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in
 finding a good college is simply that they do not get accepted due to the low level of
education
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.
Otherwise
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 speaking, The level of
education
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 in public school varies from one
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 to another,
therefore
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student
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 with a low
income
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 family background might not be qualified to register at
college
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the college
.
This
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 fact is evidenced by a recent statistics showing that 70% of
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student passing SAT exam
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the student passing SAT exam
 are living in a respectable
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the financial status of a family has a major impact on the
children
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child's
children's
education
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.
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