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The plan below show the layout of a university’s sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two plans
illustrates
Suggestion
illustrate
 the architectural framework of the university sports
centre
 and its future plan of up gradation. In present time, the university sports
centre
 lack many facilities which are planned to construct in it to provide students more facilities regarding athletic and physical activities. The sports
centre
currently have
Suggestion
currently has
is currently having
 s single pool about 25m in length with a changing room in the west and a seating area in the east. In future plan, along with
this
 pool a new leisure pool will be constructed with its separate changing room in the west of
sports
Suggestion
the sports centre
a sports centre
sports centres
centre
. Two outdoor courts, one in the east and
second
 in the west will no longer be there in future plan
instead
 a single sport hall will be made in the east. The gym will be expanded as
compare
Suggestion
compared
comparable
 to the current one, along with the construction of two dance studios
at
Suggestion
on
 the east wall of the
centre
. One more changing room will be built
at
Suggestion
on
in
 the south wall along a café too.
In addition
, a sports shop will
also
 be constructed.
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