Nowadays , many people are spending less and less time at home , What are the causes of it? What are the effects of this on individuals as well as on the society?

At present, most of the people are spending less
time
with family members
.
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.
This
is mainly because people are busy with their
work
schedules and may be the influence of social media and friends.
This
is a detrimental
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issue
and it would affect the society as well as the individual negatively
such
as, relationship gets spoiled and other social issues may occur. The
predominent
most frequent or common
predominant
cause of not spending enough
time
at home is the busy
work
schedules.
In other words
,
nowdays
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now days
people are spending
majority
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the majority
a majority
of their
time
in office to complete their project
work
,
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,
eventually coming late to
office
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the office
and end up in
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we ended
work
.
As a result
,
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,
they are unable to spend quality
time
with their family members
.
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.
This
would impact negatively both individual and society. In a nutshell, people's relationship would get affected. As they are having very less
time
with family relationships would get spoiled
.
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.
For instance
, my friend who is working in a famous IT company who spends most of the
time
in
office
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the office
for
work
assignments recently got
seperated
being or feeling set or kept apart from others
separated
from his wife because of the family problems
.
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.
That was
maily
for the most part
mainly
because he was not spending
time
with her
.
Accept space
.
It is very essential to be with family members and spend
time
with them. Another important reason for not being at home is social media and friends influence's. There are some people always influenced by friend's circle or social media and would be roaming around
with out
in absence of
without
spending
time
with family. To some extend
,
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,
friends and social networking
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are
good and
useful
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useful, however
however
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over influence
of these would spoil people's family. As of now
,
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,
many youngsters are spending
majority
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the majority
a majority
of their
time
in front of mobile phones or they would be roaming with friends.
For example
, my niece who is studying Engineering has not been spoken to parents for 2 months as he is always busy with his friends or with his mobile phone. These
inflences
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
influence
has
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have
to be controlled and one should be at home with their dear once. In conclusion,
although
people cannot spend their
time
with family due to factors like busy
work
schedules and friends
,
Accept space
,
we should make sure that we are
speding
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
quality
time
with our family members to live a happier life.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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