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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is an arguable question that whether skilled and knowledgeable people from poor countries should be given chances to work in rich countries
or
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
 not.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 fact that employees from poor countries should be allowed for jobs in rich countries as they have talents which can be used as a help in
development
Suggestion
the development
 of the country. The development of a country depends upon how much skilled its employees are. If a working person is having less skills he may take the nation to a better level.
However
, for best output, the person should be really talented in his work. The knowledge of people working in the country always take it to
greater height
Suggestion
greater heights
a greater height
.
For instance
, recent researches have shown that America has advanced in technologies because of the fact that they most of scientist are experts. Poor Countries really hold talented
people but
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people, but
 due to lack of opportunities they are not able to express them. Greater Talent requires higher wages which are obviously not available in poor countries. That’s why people in these countries look for opportunities which value their knowledge.
For example
, recent researches have shown that around one
third
 of highly skilled persons in countries having less economy are not satisfied with their wages. So they do not even perform best as per their skill. In conclusion, jobs should be allowed by rich
countries s
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countries, so
o skilled persons of poor countries as it is benefit of high economic countries and
also
 talent which is being wasted in poor nations will be efficiently utilised if they are paid higher wages
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