Universities should accept equal numbers of men and women in every subject. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Universities these days follow equality in terms of
enrollment
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for men and women to all subjects that they provide.
This
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is perhaps an approach that
neads
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
needs
appreciation as it allows people to get along with varied set of people. Some people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that in a
cohead
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child's
child
cohort
education, teens tend to get attracted to another and ruin their lives with early commitment. Some feel that
knowledge grasping capacity
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the knowledge grasping capacity
of
differnet
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
genders
vary
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varies
and
thus
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they should not be mixed.
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studying
is given
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gives
most priority
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more priority
, few still think that gender mismatch can lead to sour relations because men can
over power
overcome by superior force
overpower
women especially in physical
compitations
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competitions
. While, all the above mentioned points may be true in the past, but with
advancemnet
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the advancement
advancement
in studies related to gender, scientists have
prooved
established beyond doubt
proved
provide
that 95% of the
poppulation
the people who inhabit a territory or state
population
populations
prefer
combined
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to combine
educational structure. One
such
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example of the topic was illustrated in southern
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
wherein 50 out of 100 were admitted to mixed education and the other 50 were sent to single sex
educational
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education
institute. Those 50 who had exposure to others proved to have a
greates
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greater
greatest
great
social sense and were aware
o
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
on
or
how to talk with a range if people without hesitation. In my view equal authority
fo
appropriate to; intended for
for
of
to
men and women prove that they are competent enough to face the world. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to agree that equivalence of a university strength can help men and women have a sense of adjustment
with
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to
everyone. It
also
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develops thinking capability of any individual to a greater extent.
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