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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Owing to the hazard experienced by citizens in the world, due to the rise in the numbers of vehicles in the metropolis, a quantum of places have decided to restrict these cars from the major places in the city. In my opinion, I strongly agree that restrictions by enforced so that heavy traffic can reduce and health challenges can be curbed.
Firstly
, the ban on cars will cause a decrease in health and environmental challenges.
In other words
, the poisonous gas emitted from these cars will reduce, leading to protection of
ozone layer
Suggestion
the ozone layer
, low cases of lung cancer and likely diseases.
For instance
, the National Environmental Agency in Ghana, reported that the volume if Carbon monoxide in the atmosphere has reduced from 70% in 2006 to 30% in 2010, when the government made a rule to address the private drivers. Another point to consider, is the fact that
this
 law will ease movement.
That is
, people can get to their destinations easily and quickly because the amount of cars on the roads would have dropped.
Consequently
, there will be no gridlock and the havoc caused by
this
 will be prevented. Problems
such
 as missing appointments, losing businesses, tiredness and excess fund on fuel will all be halted.
For example
, after the embargo in the USA on own drivers in the cities, the citizens said they are better and get commendations from their employers for punctuality. In conclusion, the rule against private drivers on major roads will be effective in reducing health and environmental issues and improving movements.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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