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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by most companies that workers ought to be corporately dressed, whereas some others agree that the quality of
work
 is more important than dressing smartly. In my opinion, I completely agree
to
Suggestion
with
 the fact that an employee's
work
 outcome should be the focus
instead
 of the way they dress.
This
 essay will explain both sides of the argument. On the one hand, most business owners pay more attention to how their
work force
the force of workers available
workforce
 dresses because they believe that a man's appearance matters most in business.
Also
, it is the
first
 thing a potential client sees and
this
 can either motivate or discourage them from transacting with
such
 individual.
For example
, bankers in Nigeria are well known for wearing corporate clothing and
this
 has earned them a lot of respect and enhanced their acceptability by both their customers and the society as a whole. Casually dressed bankers are not recognised especially when they go out for marketing purposes. In essence, putting on smart clothing is essential for smooth running of business.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
the quality of
work
 rather than corporate uniform is of more importance to some employers due to the fact the a person's ability or
knnowledge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
 can not be judged by the cloth they wear. Someone can be so formal in their outfit and have zero skill or required knowledge.
In addition
, formal outfits can be uncomfortable and in order to allow workers to be at ease while working, these companies,
therefore
, give their employees the opportunity to put on whatever they want.
For instance
, my husband, who graduated as a
first
 class student from the university turned down a job offer because one of their requirements is to be clothed in a corporate uniform.
This
 company, in my opinion, lost a valuable potential employee simply because of a flimsy criteria. In conclusion, an individual's
work
 capacity should be the main focus of organizations rather than their uniforms.
Submitted by Dammy on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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