Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encouraged to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

The issue of whether grandparents should live with their extended families is partly a question of the traditions in different cultures or nationalities.
However
, the question of affordability
also
plays an increasing part, and so
this
debate is rather complex, as we shall see. On the one hand, those who support the idea of grandparents living with their children point to
the higher
Suggestion
the highest
level of emotional support which all family members may receive in
such
situations,
for example
in times of crisis
such
as bereavement.
Furthermore
, it is
also
true that personal security may be increased, offering protection against
such
problems as accidents or even robbery.
Finally
, it seems that extended family life will
also
be considerably less costly,
for instance
with lower food and utility bills, meaning that enjoyment of life may be higher.
By contrast
, supporters of grandparents living independently often state that elderly people should be encouraged to be as self-reliant as possible, as
this
boosts their self-esteem and may guard against mental decline in old age. They
also
say, with some merit, that many younger families these days do not have the housing space, or indeed the spare time, which is necessary to care properly for older members. As a
last
point, it is
also
true that many grandparents prefer to see their grandchildren on a less frequent basis (as opposed to every day), making these visits
more special
Suggestion
most special
and cherished for all concerned. Overall, it appears to me that the stronger argument is in favour of grandparents living
independently
Suggestion
Independently
, with all the advantages of self-reliance and separate space.
This
is provided that their health and finances allow them to continue living separately, without
risk
Suggestion
the risk
or the fear of isolation.
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