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In the last decade, there has been an increase in the number and variety of online courses available to adults. While welcomed as a great opportunity by many students, other students see these courses as a poor substitute for classroom teaching. What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

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Owing to advancement in technology, trend of pursuing education by means of online classes has been increased.
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, many opine that classroom teaching is still superior to online studying. Online study produces comfort in human life. By one click through
internet
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the internet
, people can learn new skills in comfortable
environment
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such
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 as home.
For instance
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, my sister in law who works in
multinational company
Suggestion
multinational companies
a multinational company
,
fullfill
put in effect
fulfil
 his
acquisation
the act of contracting or assuming or acquiring possession of something
acquisition
 of knowledge by taking online classes at home while doing home chores.
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Moreover costeffectiveness
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Moreover, cost effectiveness
Moreover cost effectiveness
 of online classes can not be denied.
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, my
hostilite
a hostile (very unfriendly) disposition
hostility
hostile
hostilities
 friend, who used to cover long distance to reach college now saves expenses of daily transport by availing opportunity of online classes.
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, long distance learning not only creates comfort, but it is cost effective.
ALTHOUGH
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, ADVANTAGES OF ONLINE CLASSES CANNOT BE DENIED
,
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,
disadvantages must be taken into consideration. The recent trend of online classes has led to loss of beauty and attractiveness that classroom
environment
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 used to bring. New generation cannot enjoy
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environment
Suggestion
an environment
the environment
 of
classroom
Suggestion
the classroom
classrooms
a classroom
 that attracts students to create a
compititive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
environment
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. TO ILLUSTRATE, In MY VILLAGE COMPITITION OF GETTING high grades had a positive impact on personality development. As
this
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 kind of healthy
compititive
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
environment
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 produce confidence in young ones. To conclude,
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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