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*QUESTION*: Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree?

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A good number of issues have resulted from the climbing rate of vehicular use in most urban settlements around the world, many of which have considered placing embargoes on the use of privately owned vehicles in the
hear
the locus of feelings and intuitions
heart
 of the
city
. I am inclined to agree with
this
 school of thought as it would be a relief to the unyielding traffic situation in most parts of the
city
.
To begin
, it is fairly well known that the frequent traffic jams experienced serially by commuters is as a result of too many vehicles plying the same route at the same time of day. People who reside at the extremes of the
city
 and those from neighbouring towns all tend to gravitate towards the
city
 hub in the mornings
as a result
 of industrialization and
location
Suggestion
the location
 of major offices and headquarters of established organizations.
Consequently
, there is a mass influx of people in their respective cars headed for the
center
table consisting of a horizontal surface over which business is transacted
counter
.
This
 does no good for the traffic situation. Roads become jammed or slow moving at best.
Also
,
city
 amenities are constructed with a certain degree of usage in mind. If every commuter decides to put their private vehicles to use, it bears down
in
Suggestion
on
 the roads and maintenance would have to be done more frequently.
Furthermore
, parking spaces are not adequately provided,
hence
, there are cars parked beside the roads, thereby
further
 streamlining them and
this
, most times, leads to chaos. In conclusion, from the foregoing, I believe privately owned locomotives should be restricted to the suburbs and people should avail themselves the opportunity of using the public transport system thereby
decongesting
 the roads and making
city
 life more bearable for all.
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