Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Why do think this is? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Migration of youngsters from far-flung communities to metropolis leaving senior citizens alone in the rural areas is the current trend in the society. The probable reason for

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trend is certainly in search of better employment opportunities and a high quality life. I believe

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tradition is a negative ramification owing to the adverse effects on the urban

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population, such

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over crowding

cause to crowd together too much

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, urban sprawling and rural poverty.

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with, the reasons for following the trend of urbanisation could be numerous, whereas among those finding a job is the most crucial one. Having studied so hard, youth prefer to earn

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incomes, which they consider it as a compensation for their hard work. The employment opportunities in the countryside are limited;

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search of highly paid jobs, which are appropriate to the degree, people migrate to urban areas, leaving fewer country dwellers. Despite the reasons, it is well known that the movement of people from the hinterland to settle in urban areas, creates a burden, which is mainly due to overpopulation, on city dwellers.

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creates

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a strain

on basic amenities, transport system and housing, which leads to urban sprawl.

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, migration of younger generation causes rural depopulation, which leads to isolation of family members especially aged people in rural areas.

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brain drain situation seems to increase the rural unemployment and ultimately enhancing rural poverty. To conclude, movement of people from rural regions to urban regions isolating older people causes negative effects

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as overcrowding, urban sprawling, rural depopulation and rural poverty.

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the other hand, the reason for

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convention is unemployment in rural areas.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

migration
economic opportunities
urban areas
rural industries
cultural heritage
overpopulation
infrastructure
healthcare facilities
educational institutions
neglect
workforce
traditional cultures
customs
pollution
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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Why do think this is? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries there are more young people choosing to enrol in work-based training instead of attending university. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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When choosing a job, while some people think that the salary is the most important thing to be taken into consideration, others have a diverse view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your opinion.