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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

#personalities #genes #character #traits
It
is argues
Suggestion
argues
is argued
 that
out
of or belonging to us
our
 personalities are predefined, as an effect of our genes before our birth and it is impossible to change it. In my view, while I agree that
character
Suggestion
the character
 of a
person
 is inborn, it can be altered
also
.
Character
Suggestion
The character
 of a
person
 is the one, which is built, before birth genetically. An individual personality is directly related to his or her genes, developed pre-birth. People possess
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
 and attitude the same way of their parent’s
character
 and they react to different situations the exact way their parents do.
That is
 to say, if a
person
possess
Suggestion
possesses
aggressive mind
Suggestion
an aggressive mind
the aggressive mind
, it is highly likely that his or her parents would be short tempered. A recent survey by the International Institute of London,
for instance
, showed that children who are polite in nature are highly likely, owing to their parents possessing
such
 attitude.
However
, personality and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of an individual can be changed. A
person
 may have a certain type of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in his or her
character
, which may not be likable, but it can be altered through environment and guidance.
This
 is because people behave and react the same way they are taught.
Similarly
, spending time in better circumstances, a bad attitude can be converted to a good one. Research by Oxford University,
for example
, revealed that out of 100 students, 70 students abandoned their unhappy nature by spending time with happy people and learning about the importance of happiness in life. In conclusion,
although
 some believe that personality is a pre-existing thing, due to genes before birth, in my opinion,
character
Suggestion
the character
 of a
person
 can be modified, through guidance and environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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