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Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world’s forests amounts to death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The tropical rain forests are considered the lungs of the
earth
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 due to their thick vegetation. They detoxify the environment of the
earth
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, the way the lungs do to the body. I firmly believe, that rapid destruction of these forests due to urbanization and industrialization is contributing to the demise of life on
earth
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 due to various reasons.
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, the Urbanization and the Industrialization
has contributed
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have contributed
 significantly to the deforestation leading to a surge in global warming. The carbon dioxide produced as a waste product of various industries and the fuel of automobiles and locomotives is continuously on the rise in our environment which is damaging the Ozone layer significantly.
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, various hazardous ultraviolet rays are reaching to us which were previously
been
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being
 stopped by protective Ozone layer.
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 has culminated
into
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in
development
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the development
 of various mutations in the DNA of human and plants. These mutations are the cause of
increase
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the increase
 in frequency of various cancers and mortality.
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, Deforestation is an important cause of increasing frequency of floods. The roots of the trees hold the ground and prevent cutting of
earth
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 at the river banks and
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 reduce the speed of water coming from mountains
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 preventing floods. When trees are lost, the frequency of floods
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 increases.
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, Destruction of the tropical forests has
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 resulted in reduction in Natural habitat of various species of
wild-life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
.
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, many endangered species have extinct by now and others are about to, unless emergency measures are taken to stop the process of forest destruction. To conclude, it is obvious that
destruction
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the destruction
 of forests will bring an end to life on
this
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 planet by global warming, floods, droughts and wildlife extinction.
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