Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

First
of all what is an
advertisement
in simple language a simple definition of my own is that if you are selling a product and you want the audience to know about your product you just simply let the people know about it by different means
i
objective form of "I"
me
I
.e.
sign
Suggestion
Sign
boards, newspapers, radio, television and internet etc.
Well
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Well, this
this
was about the
advertisement
. I support both viewpoints and I do really know the value of
advertisement
as I am running my family
business
which is a three star hotel, the point here is until now we were not advertising about our
business
on
Facebook but
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Facebook, but
recently I have started advertising about it on Facebook and I have noticed a lot of remote customers have used Facebook to reach us
otherwise
it would not be possible for them that there is a three star hotel in district
swabi
Suggestion
Swabi
, I have heard the same from so many of my customers. The point here is I provide services for which I charge some specific amount of money and the people in need of my services pay for it with pleasure. Now if my costumers won’t know about my
business
how would I improve my
business
sale so
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sale, so
advertisement
Suggestion
the advertisement
is important, another
example let
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example, let
suppose incase if I visit
city
Suggestion
a city
the city
and I need to find some tailor for putting a button on my coat and if there is no signboard or any other
advertisement
on the shops how would I find one, One can see the importance of
advertisement
that how much it is important.
Second view point
Suggestion
The second view point
about
advertisement
Suggestion
the advertisement
is they sell unnecessary things in my
opinion
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opinion, such
such
advertisements on influence children and young people, Like
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have a cousin who didn’t need an
Iphone
Suggestion
iPhone
IPhone
X but he bought
it
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it, although
although
it was not needed yet he bought it, the power of
advertisement
before launching can be sensed. In my
opinion if
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opinion, if
the product is serving the need of needy people it is
good
Suggestion
best
to advertise it, but if the is just about making
money
Accept comma addition
money, then
then
it is compelling people to buy it which is not needed and which is not good.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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