In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe that money should spend on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the salad days of
milliennium
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the millennium
millennium
, the society is polarized into two groups almost equally regarding the notion that whether few people
taught
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
it is indispensable to utilize
huge amount
Suggestion
huge amounts
of
money
on innovative
railway
lines for
fast track train
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the fast track train
or others trust that the penny could used on developing existing public transportation. Different people have their distinct mindset. The following paragraphs would shed light on both the approaches before making a final note. To commence with the
first
notion, there are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
things to be shared in
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
favor
promote over another
favour
.
First
and foremost, the reduction in traffic jams.
As a result
, due to
alot
Suggestion
a lot
of public transport the traffic has been
climed
make clean by removing dirt, filth, or unwanted substances from
cleaned
claimed
in
this
contemporary era. So, if we are using only new
railway
lines they will be
deduction
Suggestion
deducted
deducting
in traffic as well as time and energy.
Secondly
, the decline of
pollution
may occur.
Consequently
, because of transports like cars
,
Accept space
,
buses they lead emits of fossil
fuels which
Accept comma addition
fuels, which
are harmful to
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. Whereas, the
railway
lines
emittes
expel (gases or odors)
emits
less
pollution
. Shifting towards the
second
school of thought, the personal vehicle
are
Suggestion
is
much essential.
Hence
, during the emergency we need our own vehicle to travel from one place to another.
Moreover
,
group
Suggestion
the group
groups
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
save
money
and
also
time.
Therefore
, for the long distance individual journey is
waste
Suggestion
a waste
of
money
, rather than we can use public
transport which
Accept comma addition
transport, which
mainly save
money
, petrol and
also
pollution
fall. Having discussed argument and counter argument I would like to infer that it is vital to spend
higher amount
Suggestion
a higher amount
higher amounts
on building new
railway
lines for very fast trains because it reduce the
pollution
which almost save our effected mother land. To justify my state of mind, there is an instance of
example
Suggestion
an example
, where in India over 70 percent places is affected with fossil fuels due to
large number
Suggestion
a large number
of vehicle usage. Hammering the
last
nail, I personally feel that new
railway
lines are necessary for happy and safe journey.
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  • To summarize
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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