Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

Humans invent things to make their social life more comfortable;
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,
however
, these technologies
such
as mobile phones have adverse effects too. I strongly agree with the latter view due to several reasons that I will discuss in greater detail in my essay.
To begin
with, mobile phones have made communication faster and cheaper,
thus
one can easily reach their dear ones who are living in any part
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of
the earth. It is
also
possible to say
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,
as mobiles are becoming
more smarter
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smarter
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,
people can share their special memories through social networks. To exemplify, nowadays people seamlessly share their personal messages, photos, documents on Facebook and WhatsApp easily through
smartphones
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smart phones
. It goes without saying that mobiles have adverse effects too on the society. Children have become less active and contain themselves within the walls and play mobile games,
consequently
, they have fewer friends. Adults too have become socially inactive as they are well occupied in chit-chat with their buddies on social networking sites. Earlier people used to come out of their homes at night within society
compounds
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compound
for the get-together;
however
,
such
scenarios are less visible nowadays. Parents are too busy with their mobiles that they often forget to spend valuable time with their children;
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,
thus
, children feel isolated which affects their mindset too. After having discussed the most pertinent points, I feel that the only logical conclusion is that while the invention of mobiles has provided more comfort to the society, it has broadened the social gap between people and given rise to the feeling of isolation among people.
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