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Some people like to travel outside their country. Others would rather travel to tourist spots in their own country first, before travelling abroad. Which do you prefer to do and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice.

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With the increase in the means of transportation, people like to explore more places in their vacations or leisure times. Some people like international trips whereas
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 like to visit the attractions within their own
country
 before going to a place in another nation. Even, I would agree with the later preference of initial travelling within own
country
 before going abroad. In
this
 essay, I would discuss my viewpoints with relevant facts and examples that will justify my selection. There could be many reasons to go to different locations in my own land before travelling to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 realm.
First
 and foremost, the main cause of
this
 is to gain a prior experience of travelling within the own comfort zone. In continuation to
this
 notion, it is easy to communicate with people of a similar culture and it is comparatively easier to make arrangements of a trip within own
country
.
Subsequently
, it would be easier to get a help in case of an emergency by interacting in a regional language.
For example
, on a trip to Berlin, if a tourist is stuck
at
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in
some-place
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someplace
 surrounded by local people who can speak the
only German language
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German language only
. In these cases, a native speaker can get help very easily. The tips during local would help a lot while travelling outside a
country
.
Moreover
, travelling within own
country
 costs less because the domestic mode of transportation is cheaper than international flights and currency values of some countries are lesser than other countries like 1 Canadian dollar
costs
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cost
 50 Indian Rupees. According to a recent survey, only 25% of the Indian population
has
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have
 a passport because most of the people like to travel in their own
country
first
. To recapitulate, in my opinion, travelling within own
country
first
 would prove very beneficial for international trips. Local tours can give an experience of time and expense
management which
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management, which
 could be used in preparing long distance trips.
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