Today most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is this a positive or negative development

People who decide to have children later in life is increasing rapidly these
days many
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days, many
people appreciate
this
trend while a section of society think that people should marry when they are
younger I
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younger, I
believe the
age
of thirties is the best time to get married because
this
will bring higher benefits to society.
To begin
with, at the
age
of thirties couple is mature enough to handle all the situation after
marriage they
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marriage, they
have a power of understanding
as a result
of
this
they can easily understand each other as well the likes and dislikes of their offspring
moreover
after younger stage they stand on their
foot
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feet
for example
mature couple never depend on their parents as their carrier is stable so it is the best idea to get married at the
age
of thirties. On the other side, if people are interested to marry at their early
age
of their life they can face many problems because couples have
lack
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a lack
of understanding with their
soulmate
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soul mate
as a consequence of
this
plural of "this"
these
parents not able to teach moral values to their children because of conflicts. To conclude,
marriage
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marry
and have babies in the paramount decision of
one s
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one's
ones
life so they should marry when they mature and ready for it.
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