Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Recently, there has been an ongoing controversy that has given rise to the question which says, “Is

money

the major way to staying happy?”. Possessing enough funds has made individuals very excited, because all their basic needs and wants can be catered to by

this

however

, happiness can be generated if one has a united family.

This

essay will highlight these at length.

To begin

with, as the saying goes, “ human wants are insatiable “, but these

desirables

worth having or seeking or achieving

desirable

cannot be gotten by anyone if the cash to accomplish them are unavailable.

For instance

, a man who lives in a one-room

apartment but

Accept comma addition

apartment, but

wishes to move houses can achieve

this

if he has enough capital on him.

In addition

, when people want to go on vacation to rest their heads from our day to day activities and be happy, a lot of

money

will be involved,

hence

it is still

money

to the rescue.Else depression will set in and can lead to death by the unavailability of funds to carry out these needs. Notwithstanding, a united family to run to by any individual cannot be overemphasized because no man is an island

Accept space

hence

, a family to be with and ease

off

connects a noun with the preceding word

stress or speak to when frustration rears

it’s

of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

its

head is key. A good family is another source of generating happiness by anyone as

this

will be our go-to- persons when a head to lean on is desired by people.

This

will lighten ones heavy heart and does not lead to one losing his mind. A research was conducted by five students in the northern part of Nigeria, they discovered that people who had good grades in school were the ones who came from happy homes. In conclusion, the key role

money

plays in the lives of human beings cannot be overemphasized, as

this

has seen

Suggestion

peoples

desirables though

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desirable, though

desirable though

their

Suggestion

they're

having companions is another source of achieving happiness by any individual.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

322 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Financial security
Basic needs
Comfort
Luxury
Freedom
Altruistic
Philanthropy
Nurturing relationships
Fulfillment
Sense of accomplishment
Physical well-being
Spiritual beliefs
Community involvement
Gratitude
Mindfulness
Simple pleasures

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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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