Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Recently, there has been an ongoing controversy that has given rise to the question which says, “Is
money
the major way to staying happy?”. Possessing enough funds has made individuals very excited, because all their basic needs and wants can be catered to by
this
,
however
, happiness can be generated if one has a united family.
This
essay will highlight these at length.
To begin
with, as the saying goes, “ human wants are insatiable “, but these
desirables
worth having or seeking or achieving
desirable
cannot be gotten by anyone if the cash to accomplish them are unavailable.
For instance
, a man who lives in a one-room
apartment but
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apartment, but
wishes to move houses can achieve
this
if he has enough capital on him.
In addition
, when people want to go on vacation to rest their heads from our day to day activities and be happy, a lot of
money
will be involved,
hence
it is still
money
to the rescue.Else depression will set in and can lead to death by the unavailability of funds to carry out these needs. Notwithstanding, a united family to run to by any individual cannot be overemphasized because no man is an island
,
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,
hence
, a family to be with and ease
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
stress or speak to when frustration rears
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
head is key. A good family is another source of generating happiness by anyone as
this
will be our go-to- persons when a head to lean on is desired by people.
This
will lighten ones heavy heart and does not lead to one losing his mind. A research was conducted by five students in the northern part of Nigeria, they discovered that people who had good grades in school were the ones who came from happy homes. In conclusion, the key role
money
plays in the lives of human beings cannot be overemphasized, as
this
has seen
to
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in
peoples
desirables though
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desirable, though
desirable though
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having companions is another source of achieving happiness by any individual.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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