Using a computer everyday can have negative than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples.

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In modern days, usage of computer has become very
vital even
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vital, even
as a daily utensil just like a book or office file, for all
age
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groups of
life
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, right from months baby till old aged people, for numerous reasons. It has become part of
life
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, wherein, enormous facilities like education, games, fun, watching movies, videos, listening to music, practice many skills, having online classes, conference calls, interviews, meetings, and many more. Now-a-days, kids are using computers
everyday
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every day
, which is not completely encourage able as it impacts on the
brain
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negatively. Many health issues related to eyes, nose,
brain
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, ear, tongue and nerves, are raised due to the regular access of these systems. There are many purposes children utilize these gadgets, like educative videos are viewed, improving the skills of the education.
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, it is a well known fact that a visual stamps the course instantly and for
long time
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a long time
, rather than reading from the books or magazines. They
are preferring
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prefer
to operate
computers are
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computers, are
they are compatible for them
more easier
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easier
than a television or others
like wise
in like or similar manner
likewise
.
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, a kid at the
age
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of 4, studying junior kindergarten, likes to take a computer for learning a rhyme, as it contains the application, where the rhyme is sung with certain music, tunings and pictures or cartoons. On the positive side, it is great that the rhyme is learnt rapidly and is much remembered by the infant for long duration. Whereas, on the flip side, the eyes get badly effected leading to low vision like
eye sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
,
brain
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might decay, etc. In recent years, scientists on their research on the
ophtalmology
the branch of medicine concerned with the eye and its diseases
ophthalmology
related issues, revealed with proofs that the
axal
of or relating to or resembling an axis of rotation
axial
length of the retina
dn
the habitation of wild animals
den
then
the cornea are infected by the rays, that are emitted by the electronic goods like computer systems and laptops.
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, diseases like sudden
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strokes, are
occured
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occurring
occurred
due to continuous glance at the desktops, which restricts the nervous
sytem
instrumentality that combines interrelated interacting artifacts designed to work as a coherent entity
system
to a specific path.
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, due to typing the letters of the
key board
device consisting of a set of keys on a piano or organ or typewriter or typesetting machine or computer or the like
keyboard
, the nervous system gets hampered, along with the weakening of the muscles and bones. Stretching the body and limbs in a single posture for more hours, will
initially
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, decrease the blood pressure, impacting the nervous system of the neck to
spine
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the spine
from hands,
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, ends with the major hurdles like
scatica
neuralgia along the sciatic nerve
sciatica
and disc lapse. Many-a-times, it might lead to heart stroke, ceasing the
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with unknown reasons. Researches have proved
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in many angles with
disctinct
(often followed by 'from') not alike; different in nature or quality
distinct
proven records or patients. These consequences are clearly seen in growing children under the
age
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of 15, stopping their growth in height, adverse effects of
brain
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, indigestion related problems, declining their grasping power, controlling their exposure to the World,
incliniation
an attitude of mind especially one that favors one alternative over others
inclination
in the preference of staying lonely, wrong circle of friends, diverting their
mainds
that which is responsible for one's thoughts and feelings; the seat of the faculty of reason
minds
mind
mounds
in incorrect paths of career or
life
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, etc.
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, doctors are warning regularly, to keep away children of
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age
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group as they will lead to a mental disturbance, after they get to use computers. At
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, in view of all the above
repurcussions
a remote or indirect consequence of some action
repercussions
, I strongly agree that it is not correct to make children access to the computers daily.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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