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Destruction of the world’s forests can result in the death of the world we currently know. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Forests are an integral part of the
planet
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earth
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 and they are like lungs of it, as they help the
planet
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 to breathe properly.
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Therefore I
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Therefore, I
 am in consummate
accord
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accordance
 with
this
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 statement and in my opinion
deforestation
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 will eventually lead to the end of many species on
earth
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. Forests keep ecological balance intact and help the survival of numerous species including human beings. They have an impact on climate and weather conditions. Trees in forests help to purify the
air
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 by taking CO2 and releasing oxygen. They provide shelter
to
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for
 several animals during all seasons like hot summer and heavy rainy season. They play a key role in maintaining the temperatures balanced. If the
planet
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 has trees in abundance, the change of seasons will occur naturally. On the flip side,
deforestation
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 leads to irreparable damage and severe /disastrous consequences. More and more trees are being cut down to accommodate the needs of the growing population.
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 in turn
is impacting
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impacts
 the
earth
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 in a very undesirable manner.
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, the increased pace of
deforestation
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 accelerates global warming and results in the melting of polar ice. Uncontrolled cutting of trees
also
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 leads to
air
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 pollution. If trees are cut, the
air
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 does not get purified and the polluted
air
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 becomes a major health hazard for all living beings. Many animals and birds have already lost their
habitats
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habitat
 and are facing extinction. As forests are destroyed, the rare herbs and medicines found in them
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 get destroyed. In conclusion, forests play a key role in the survival of life on the
earth
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 and excessive
deforestation
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 will wreak havoc and lead to the loss of most of the species and ultimately the end of life on the
planet
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.

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