You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter • Correct the information in the article • Explain why is it important for the magazine to give correct information • Suggest what the magazine should do about the situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction

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an article in your magazine that contained misleading information about the recent mishap that took place at the Sai Baba Temple in Hyderabad, India. The magazine stated that there were several casualties which I know for the fact that there were none. Every year on the 29th of June, the temple celebrates a festival named Sravan Mass; which is supposed to be an auspicious day

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Hindu devotees.

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year, due to

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increase in the number of people, a stampede occurred injuring around 20 people. Since

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is a sacred place and well know across the country, thousands of

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travel from every corner to witness

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powerful day.

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false information can not only affect the reputation but

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the beliefs of the people who come to visit.

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, in the near future, I would strongly suggest that the magazine

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works together with the local temple officials and the police department to get their facts right as there would be

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of things at stake. I hope you would take the necessary action at the earliest. Yours sincerely, Nikhil Kumar

Submitted by nikhildp.maxout on Mon Jul 22 2019

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Topic Vocabulary:

Rectify
Misrepresentation
Tourism
Editor
Credibility
Accuracy
Local heritage
Fact-checking
Repercussions
Counteractive measures
Publishing ethics
Clarification
Factual error
Misconception
Authenticity

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