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some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computers should replecae them. however others do not agree. discuss both the sides and give your opinion

#people #libraries #waste #resources #money #computers #replecae
It is considered by some that the libraries are avoidable expenditure
on
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of
 the limited available resources, while others feel that libraries play an important role in the development of a community.
This
 essay will discuss both the aspects before reaching to any opinion. On one hand, an increasing number of people do not want libraries in the
first
 place because of its economic implications.
This
 is because building a library requires an initial cost of construction and a recurring cost of maintenance of the same. With the advance of computers, the books available can be saved
in
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on
 the hard drive which can be accessed anywhere based on once comforts.
For example
, one need not carry heavy books
of
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on
 a subject
around but
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around, but
instead
 save them as a digital copy, which can be easily shared and carried around.
In addition
, it is beneficial to the environment as it reduces cutting of trees needed for the manufacturing of paper to print copies of
book
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the book
books
a book
.
However
,
on the other hand
, one needs to remind themselves that library is not only a place for the collection of
books but
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books, but
also
 the place for people to study, gather and exchange ideas. Many students sit together for
study group
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study, group
 discussion and people organize the exhibition, workshops for learning and understanding new areas of interest.
For instance
, recently it has been seen that libraries are
organizing
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organized
 weekly or monthly theme in which they have workshops or exhibition promoting a general topic of interest. To sum up, library and
computers both
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computers, both
 are
boon
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a boon
 to the society and together they effectively shape our future and enhance the knowledge enrichment of the people in the society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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