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Research suggests that the majority of criminals who are sent to prison would commit crimes when set free? What are the reasons? What can be done to solve the problem?

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It is true that there is a high rate of recidivism when the sinners are emancipated from prison.
Although
 there will undoubtedly
be cause
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be the cause
because
 for
this
 trend, societies can take steps to mitigate these potential problems. There are some reasons why criminals break the law when set free. The bottom line is the society’s segregation towards ex-prisoners. The public is often afraid that offenders can pose a threat to them and their beloved.
For example
, my
neighbor
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbour
, who had a dysfunctional childhood, was convicted of drug trafficking. After being discharged, he was shunned by those around him.
As a result
, he put up with a sense of alienation, which gave rise to his offending and a life sentence.
In addition
, ex-prisoners have a tendency to be unemployed when they are back to the community. In many cases, employers decline their CV by virtue of their bad track record.
Therefore
, while living below the poverty line, they have to resort to drug trafficking to at least live
in
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at
on
 a subsistence level. There are several actions that the government could take to solve the problems described above.
Firstly
, the government can launch philanthropic campaigns to raise public perception of ex-prisoners.
From
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With
 that, the public can have empathy for sinners and help them assimilate into society again to be intent on turning their lives around.
Moreover
, the public and private sectors should be less stringent and give a chance to find employment.
Finally
, offenders should be given more vocational education, including manual work or technical work so that they can make a living and deter themselves from being a recidivist. In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that criminals have a tendency to re-offend after being set free.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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