Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At present, celebrities are well-known because of the image of glamour and fortune associated with them, not because of their accomplishments, so according to some,
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young people. In my opinion, I strongly disagree that celebrities set a bad
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to young people as celebrities do not ask people to worship them. A good reason to not take celebrities as
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models is that a celebrity’s
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in society is to entertain people, not to set a moral
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for young people.
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, celebrities generally want to gain a lot of publicity and achieve fame.
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, they want always to be in the spotlight because
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is the sole purpose of their job. To cite an
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, a movie star in Egypt mentioned in one of his interviews that young people should think twice before imitate other’s
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because people always don’t pay any attention to their
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in public in many cases. Another point to consider is that, like everyone else, celebrities may have moral shortcomings and make the wrong life choices. Young people don’t know the concept that celebrities make mistakes like us. Due to the lack of experience that young people have, they see celebrities as positive
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models in their life to help them to live with hope, integrity, and compassion.
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, if one of their
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, a famous football player committed suicide
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week because of his financial worries, and
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, three of his fans were trying to kill themselves by committing suicide as well.
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, parents, teachers, and scientists rather than celebrities should be
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models in our society. These people have tremendous positive effects on people’s
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. Young people can learn from their parents, how to be more dedicated, and how to behave responsibly in public.
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, young people should be taught that they can be very successful and a very good person at the same time,
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as scientists.
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, Ahmed Zewail, who was awarded the Nobel Prize in Chemistry for his work in
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model for our children.
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, teachers, scientists, and parents are needed to compensate for the lack of positive
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models among politicians and business people. In conclusion, while celebrities are responsible for their actions and they did not ask young people to take them as
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models, there are some people ought to be taken as a moral
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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