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Some people think cheap air travel brings us benefits while others believe that non-essential flights should be cut in order to reduce environmental problems caused by cheap air travel. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The increasingly grown
air
 industry has enabled more people to enjoy
air
 flights than before. While some people concern about the environmental issues given by
this
 development, I believe that it brings more benefits than problems. On one hand, the serious amount of energy consumption and toxic gas emission remain the greatest concerns.
In
Suggestion
At
 the time when the
air fare
the fare charged for traveling by airplane
airfare
 was expensive, only a limited number of people could afford to buy
such
 service so that the energy used for fuel was proportionally low.
However
, the advent of cheap flights allows more people to travel by
air
 more frequently,
thus
 the consumption of oil needed for fuel has
also
 increased dramatically. The immediate result of
this
 movement is that the worrying gas emission, and examples can be seen from studies showing that the carbon dioxide emissions worsened since the fast growth of
air industry
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the air industry
.
On the other hand
, the advantages given by inexpensive
air
 travel are fundamental. The major positive lies in the easy access for
more lower
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lower
 income individuals. Because of the reasonable price, they could not only reach other
continents but
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continents, but
also
 broaden their horizons to have a better understanding of different cultures. Another important element in
this
 trend is that it reduces the gap between the rich and poor to some extent.
This
 means the
air
 service has no longer been the priority of people with high socioeconomic status, but people from all walks of life are given chances. In conclusion,
although
 the environmental cost brought by cheap
air
 travel can never be neglected, we should embrace the advantages given by
this
 trend. From my perspective, it is still necessary to keep developing inexpensive airlines
while
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 take environmental factors,
such
 as adopting green energy, into account.
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  • carbon footprint
  • carbon emissions
  • cultural exchange
  • economic growth
  • environmental impact
  • global connectivity
  • noise pollution
  • overtourism
  • sustainable tourism
  • sustainable aviation fuels
  • carbon offsetting
  • aviation industry
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  • eco-friendly
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