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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates.  What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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Climate change is among the principal dangers facing people
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 protection as the most viable solution. The foremost problem caused by sea levels creeping up is the flooding of peoples’ residences. Millions of people all over the world live in coastal areas and if the sea rises by even a few feet, they will be inundated with water and lose their property. Shelter is
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 of the most basic of human needs and widespread flooding would cause millions of people to become homeless, not to mention losing all of their possessions. The devastation brought about by
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 was clear for all to see during the 2011 Tsunami in Japan, in which millions of people were displaced. A possible solution to
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 barriers. 
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 defences,
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 as dikes, dams and floodgates,  could be built along coasts and waterways, thereby stopping the water reaching populated areas. The Netherlands is
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 of the most populated areas in the world and
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 of the most vulnerable to flooding and they have successfully employed various
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 defence systems. To conclude, stemming the rising tides caused by increasing global temperatures is
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 of the foremost challenges we face and it will ultimately lead to many of the worlds’ cities being left underwater, but a possible solution could be to utilise the
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 prevention techniques already used by countries like Holland. It is predicted that more and more countries will be forced to take
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 measures to avoid a watery catastrophe.
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