Many criminal commits further crimes as soon as they are released from the prison. What do you think causes of this ? What effect this have on the society ?

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The repeated offenders or the seasoned criminals are
biggest menace
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the biggest menace
for
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to
the
society
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.The reasons may be circumstances or
personality
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of convicts behind
crimes
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the crimes
, but still
influnce
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
influenced
influences
society
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in bad ways and need
proper approach
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a proper approach
to curb
this
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problem.
Firstly
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, it will be prudent to analyse the behaviour of repeated convicts.It is argued by many social workers that the majority of crime
are
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is
circumstantial rather
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then
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than
a result of criminal
personality
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.
Further
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,
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,
many
believes
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believe
that lack of basic needs like food and medical drives person to be a criminal.As a
consequnces
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequence
consequences
,
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,
once
person
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a person
is
convicted
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convicted, then
then
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is very difficult for them to get a job in
reagular stream
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the regular stream
regular stream
a regular stream
irregular stream
of
society
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and they again
resor
have recourse to
resort
to crime.
However
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, there are
few percentage
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a few percentage
of
criminal
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criminals
who commits felony due to criminal
personality
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and requires medical attention to change their
personality
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.To illustrate, many
celebrity
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celebrities
get caught for
shope
a mercantile establishment for the retail sale of goods or services
shop
lifting and later on proven that it is mental illness and can get cured with
proper rehabilitation programme
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the proper rehabilitation programme
. On the other side of
spectrum
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the spectrum
,
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,
there are majority of law abiding citizens, who suffers due to repeated offenders. As a
consequences
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consequence
, the government brings strict law about night
movenment
a change of position that does not entail a change of location
movement
due to which
commmon
belonging to or participated in by a community as a whole; public
common
command
citizens
suffers
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suffer
.
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Further it
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Further, it
costs government exchequers to maintain law and order
,
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,
and it
reduce
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reduces
budet
a sum of money allocated for a particular purpose
budget
for other
nacessary
absolutely essential
necessary
unnecessary
field like
medical
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medicine
and education
.
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.
Despite the effort by government, common people
lives
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live
under fear for their safety and it creates negative and fearful atmosphere in the
society
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. In
this
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type of
society
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all creative and social works stop flourishing. It can be
exemplefied
be characteristic of
exemplified
that countries with
higher crime rate
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a higher crime rate
lacks progress in creative work and social cause like women empowerment. To conclude
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,
the majority of criminal can be
abeted
prevent the occurrence of; prevent from happening
averted
abetted
by providing them basic needs and rehabilitation, while giving strict punishment to seasoned white collar criminal.
As a result
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,
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,
the
society
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could flourish at its best in art
,
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,
science and social causes due to safe and secure environment.
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