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Some people think media should be allowed to publicize information on someone’s private life. Some others believe that media should be regulated in this regard. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and relevant examples.

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There is disagreement on whether private
information
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 of individuals should be exposed in the media. Some people believe that a strong
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 liberal democracy
require
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requires
 the media to be totally free to publish
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information regardless
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information, regardless
 of its level of privacy, while others think that private
life
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 is a red line that should remain protected. In my opinion, the publication of private
information
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 depends on whether the individual is a public figure or a regular citizen. Many people think that publicizing private
information
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 is beneficial for the society
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 It is undeniable that
free media
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a free media
 is essential for having a sound democratic system. In
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 regard, if private
life
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, which is an extremely ambiguous term, is not allowed to be publicized by law,
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 could actually be used as an excuse to censor the media and hinder the fight against corrupted officials.
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, preventing the media to present politicians’ private
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 will negatively affect the society overall.
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, giving the media a free pass to access private
information
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 could have detrimental consequences
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for
 individuals. To elaborate more, feeling always exposed can make people feel unsafe and anxious.
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, leaking private data can be used to blackmail and extort people, which is unethical.
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,
media
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the media
 should be regulated to safeguard privacy. In my opinion, publishing private
information
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 depends on the nature of the individual. If it is a public figure,
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 private
life
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 should be available for the people. In fact, politicians should understand that their private
life
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 exposure is an inevitable tax that should be paid to earn public’s trust.
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, ordinary citizens’ private
information
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 should not be available for the public
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 as there is no benefit from exposing it, and it could hurt their
life
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 severely. To conclude, private
life
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 coverage in the media is healthy to keep public figures in check, but I believe that regular people’s privacy should be protected.
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 way, the society will be safe from corruption, and individuals will live in peace.

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