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Some students take one year off between finishing school and going to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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The trend of taking a
gap
year
 after schooling is growing with a rapid pace. While students get ample
time
 to decide their area of professional study, they get to learn a lot about living a practical life. Since there
exist
Suggestion
exists
 a negligible drawback of delaying a
year
 of academic
education
, in my opinion the benefits are far more advantageous
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 the demerits of taking a
gap
year
.
To begin
 with, students must be sure about the area of
education
 in which they wish to pursue their professional training.During the
time
 when students take
gap
Suggestion
a gap year
year
, they can research on their preferred area of study.
For example
, according to the survey conducted by the students of the Harvard University, students who took
gap
year
 had proven more successful over
thosewho
Suggestion
those who
 continued their college
education
immiediatly
without delay or hesitation; with no time intervening
immediately
 after finishing school. The proper selection of the professional course has proven more significant in the terms of an efficient professional career.
Furthermore
, during the
time
 of
gap
year
, students prefer to either travel or work to gain some practical hands on experiences.
Such
time
 period when a student performs various actions independently, he acquires crucial practical knowledge that will help him throughout his life.
For example
, Jake Smith, who is among the top software professionals in the world used to work in a small Information
technology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
Technology
 firm during his
gap
year
.
Such
 experiences can never be learnt during academic studies. To conclude, while a few pupils prefer to take some
time
 prior to the start of their university
education
, they get enormous
time
 to decide on their future
alongwith
Suggestion
along with
 opportunities to get practical industrial experiences.
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