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The graph given below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph given below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The given graphical data apprises us with the four different methods of transportation
prevailed
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 in England between 1974 to 2002 with their corresponding amount of luggage carried in
this
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 period. We can figure out that the most commonly used mode of goods shifting was by road and the least popular way of
the
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transportation was through
pipeline
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the pipeline
a pipeline
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.
Initially
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 from 1974 till 1978, all
the
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four means of transport earned popularity, though roads remained at the top with around
70million
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a 70million
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 tons followed by 40
million
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 for
both
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 train and sea and
finally
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 pipeline which shared less than 10
million
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 in
a
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descending order. In 1978, the preference for
both
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 ships and
pipeline
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pipelines
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 hiked i.e. 55 and 18
million
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 respectively,
whereas
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 the requirement
of
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both
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 road and railway dropped to 70 and 35
million
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 tonnes. From there on the proportion of all the four modes kept on fluctuating with small ups and downs till 1998 when
finally
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, a dramatic surge was noted in luggage
carrier
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carriers
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 of
both
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 water which showed more than 20% usage than was in 1974 i.e. 62
million
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 and rail which settled roughly at the same liking as was in 1974 i.e. 42millions. In summary,
overall
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 all the three ways of transport raised in their usage by almost one quarter,
in
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contrast
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 the trains after many disliking spells
finally
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 settled at the same level
from
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as
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 where
it
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they
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 started in 1974.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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