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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that the government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public.

#government #money #life #planets #people
It is a true fact that governments all
arount
in the area or vicinity
around
 the world have to deal with the duty to choose where to invest the limited amount of resources available. One of those many field where to invest can be the research of living creatures outside of our planet. On the one hand, investments of
this
 type are at the foundation of progress. In the past it happened many and many times that researches of
this
 kind, previously seen as too much futuristic and abstract, ended up with astonishing results, writing pages of history. As
instance
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an instance
, the
landing
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land
 of the man on the moon had a similar feeling, but eventually they really manage to get it done.
Moreover
, considering the dimensions of the known universe, the
chanses
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
chances
channels
changes
 that the correct conditions have been verified only on our planet are less than the one that there is life somewhere else.
On the other hand
, the world is facing an incredible amount of more basic challenges that can be easily
addessed
(of mail) marked with a destination
addressed
 with the money invested in those discovery programs, namely the poverty, the lack of education in developing countries, and the
last
 but most important, the climate change.
Although
 all of
this
 is true, in my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 should be a balanced division between the expenses in life discovery and other actual topics. In conclusion, It may be true that the topic of life discovery in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 planet is not completely understood by most of the people, for reasons
such
 as the lack of education or curiosity.
Nevertheless
, I firmly think that a non negligible amount of public money should be invested on these topics.
Submitted by Mario rossi on

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