An increasing number of professionals, such as professionals, doctors and teachers are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with the situation?

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No doubt

their

in or at that place

there

is increase in education and technology the people

now a days

the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech

nowadays

are adopting the profession courses like doctors and

teachers but

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teachers, but

they are not serving in their own

country

rather

immigrating

leave one's country of residence for a new one

emigrating

to other countries.

This

is a major problem to

considered

Suggestion

consider

for the countries progress and development.In my opinion as the income of teachers and doctors are not much paid they are rather moving to

others

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

nations for their own future. One of the major

reason

Suggestion

reasons

for the immigration of professionals is less paid

salary

in their own developing

country

.They are giving their full time on their

jobs but

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jobs, but

the outcome

that is

salary

Suggestion

the salary

they are getting is much less for their work.There is no progress of their life so they are moving to other countries to build their future.Take

for instance

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the

salary

given in India in a private school is very less compared to a teacher

salary

in any abroad

country

This

create

Suggestion

creates

a lot of problems in their own

country

like the qualified doctors and teachers moving to other

countries making

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countries, making

them

un available

not available or accessible or at hand

unavailable

in their own

country

to serve of their people. The solution I think

for

Suggestion

about

this

problem is to pay the professionals with

good amount

Suggestion

a good amount

so that they

can too make

Suggestion

can make

can to make

their careers in their own field. To

conclude I

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conclude, I

must say giving them best

salary

to the professionals make them unable to serve

for

Suggestion

another

country

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An increasing number of professionals, such as professionals, doctors and teachers are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with the situation?

Fully explain your ideas

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In the future it may be necessary for us to live on other planets. For this reason some people believe that we should spend money now to research other planets, such as Mars. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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