An increasing number of professionals, such as professionals, doctors and teachers are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries What problems do this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with the situation?

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No doubt
their
in or at that place
there
is increase in education and technology the people
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
are adopting the profession courses like doctors and
teachers but
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teachers, but
they are not serving in their own
country
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rather
immigrating
leave one's country of residence for a new one
emigrating
to other countries.
This
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is a major problem to
considered
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consider
for the countries progress and development.In my opinion as the income of teachers and doctors are not much paid they are rather moving to
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
nations for their own future. One of the major
reason
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reasons
for the immigration of professionals is less paid
salary
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in their own developing
country
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.They are giving their full time on their
jobs but
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jobs, but
the outcome
that is
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salary
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the salary
they are getting is much less for their work.There is no progress of their life so they are moving to other countries to build their future.Take
for instance
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,
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,
the
salary
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given in India in a private school is very less compared to a teacher
salary
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in any abroad
country
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.
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create
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creates
a lot of problems in their own
country
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like the qualified doctors and teachers moving to other
countries making
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countries, making
them
un available
not available or accessible or at hand
unavailable
in their own
country
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to serve of their people. The solution I think
for
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of
about
this
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problem is to pay the professionals with
good amount
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a good amount
so that they
can too make
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can make
can to make
their careers in their own field. To
conclude I
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conclude, I
must say giving them best
salary
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to the professionals make them unable to serve
for
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in
another
country
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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