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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

#zoo #purpose
Modern world today
,
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it is sometimes believed that zoos are serving no purpose;
however
, I completely disagree with the viewpoint as these have
relevant position
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a relevant position
 in society
.
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.
These institutions educating and entertaining the public and protecting animals from extinction
.
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.
Firstly
,
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displaying animals in
zoo
 enable visitors to observe them from close proximity since they are under the cage.Going for
a
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an
 African safari or wild hunting may not be a possible
options
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option
 for many;
therefore
,
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,
visiting a
zoo
can be resolve
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can resolve
this
 issue.To illustrate
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,
every
zoo
 authority
provide
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provides
visiters
someone who visits
visitors
visits
 with experts guide.
As a result
,
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,
public
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the public
 get
better understanding
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a better understanding
 of
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
 and wild animals.
Moreover
,
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,
zoos are kind of educational institution for students who learning animal behaviour.
For example
, zoology and
Vetenery
Suggestion
veterinary
 students.
Additionally
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most of the zoos have sufficient documents regarding particular animal so students can do their research by visiting animals here
Finally
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many animals which are on the verge extinction are protected in zoos from its predators.
However
,
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some consider
this
 is not his natural environment.In zoos, captured animals have been
cared
freed from illness or injury
cured
 by medical experts along with providing food at regular intervals and living in a safe environment without the fear of any enemies. In conclusion
,
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,
people are divided by the idea of
zoo
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a zoo
the zoo
zoos
 and its purpose.Opponents believe that zoos are
waste but
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a waste, but
a waste but
 I strongly
deney
declare untrue; contradict
deny
 the statement.
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