Some people say that the best way to improve public health is b increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #health #b #sports #facilities #effect #measures

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Some people argue that citizens can get healthy lifestyle if they are

provides

Suggestion

providing

sports facilities. While others say that

in addition

Linking Words

such

Linking Words

facilities, various steps are required to improve the

health

Use synonyms

public

Suggestion

the public

Although

Linking Words

, sports and games have

vital role

Suggestion

a vital role

to make people healthy, but in my opinion, individuals can enjoy good

health

Use synonyms

if they are given education about its importance and fast food and smoking and banned in the society. On the one hand, physical activities keep the person active and fit. Due to the participation in sports and games, obesity level in the human body

decreases which

Accept comma addition

decreases, which

is the cause of severe diseases.

For example

Linking Words

, in Pakistan, the students of

government universities

Accept comma addition

government, universities

are healthier and smarter than the pupils of private colleges because they find opportunities to play soccer and cricket in university playgrounds.

However

Linking Words

, I think that only sports are not beneficial for the good

health

Use synonyms

of people unless they get awareness about it and stop using cigarette and other food which enhances

cholesterol level

Suggestion

the cholesterol level

body

Suggestion

the body

On the other hand

Linking Words

, residents will be conscious about their

health

Use synonyms

if they study it and consumption of unhealthy diets is banned. When inhabitants are informed about their physical and mental conditions, they struggle hard to make them better.

In addition

Linking Words

, if citizens do not find

chance

Suggestion

a chance

the chance

to use unhealthy diet, they will not suffer in lungs and stomach problems.

For instance

Linking Words

, in educational institutes of Pakistan, consumption of cigarette is restricted because it disturbs the respiratory system of adults. I am in the

favor

promote over another

favour

of aforementioned steps that are necessary to prevent citizens from

health

Use synonyms

issues. In conclusion,

although

Linking Words

the availability of sports and games is important for the good

health

Use synonyms

of individuals, but I believe that awareness about good

health

Use synonyms

and ban of unhealthy food in country play crucial role

Suggestion

the good

health

Use synonyms

public

Suggestion

the public

. Chat Conversation End Type a message...

Submitted by Faisal on Fri Jul 26 2019

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

315 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6
band
Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some people often argue that, students of higher Institutes should learn non-subject areas as well other than their major field while others argue that they should solely focus on their major. In my point of view, it is better to study other subjects as well because it helps maintain a balanced mindset and ultimately, it improves the knowledge of the students.
8
band
Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.
A group of individuals present the view that residents have a personal obligation to maintain cleanliness and order in their own neighbourhoods, whereas others believe it is fundamentally the government's duty. I strongly agree with the former opinion.
4.5
band
In a public-funded healthcare system, people who are willing to pay for the best and fast treatment should be able to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Most of the countries have public-funded healthcare system to help their people can access good doctors and medicals.This organization helps poor or medium class family financially as the cost of medicine and medical care are very expensive but some people who has money want faster and better treatment.I'm not agree with this statement because this system was created for every person.
6
band
An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers , are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?
As we observed, the number of qualified people is increasing nowadays. Even though they are leaving their own countries to find an opportunity substantially, they would work in advanced countries.
5.5
band
art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?
Whether students must study art courses because of their importance makes an argument. This writer believes art classes do help children but making art classes compulsory is not need because they lean more on hobbies rather than subjects, other subjects such as math, physics are more important for the child's development.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is b increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government's responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

In a public-funded healthcare system, people who are willing to pay for the best and fast treatment should be able to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers , are leaving their own poor countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high schools. to what extent do you agree or disagree ?