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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad.

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People in the world often leave their
home
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country
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 for better living, studying advanced courses and for making money. There are many edges of leaving
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country
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the country
 which
include
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includes
 high standards of
life
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 with
garaunteed
give surety or assume responsibility
guaranteed
 income.
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, they will miss their loved ones in the
home
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country
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. Many students have a dream to study as much as they could like, a student who completed bachelors want to do masters to excel in his field. But, due to lack of resources in their nation, they look for others.
This
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 helps them in achieving the goal with a good job.
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Second advantage
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The second advantage
A second advantage
 in leaving
home
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country
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 is better living conditions, many people think that their
life
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 is not up to the mark in terms of
job
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jobs
the job
, making money or the culture they live in. They can move to the
country
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 they like to live happily.
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, many people from Mexico want to be in the United Sates of America as there is increased crime rate and job shrink in Mexico. Family plays a very vital role in everyones
life
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, leaving their family to study or to work in abroad is the primary disadvantage.
people
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People
 regularly think about their loved ones in their
home
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 soil.
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Second reason
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The second reason
 is the food problem, people often customized with some kind of food from
their birth which
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their birth, which
 will get changed upon leaving their
home
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. Not but not the least, many successful people settle in the
foriegn
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 soil doing business.
This
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 is very bad because they are not contributing to their
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home land
the country where you were born
homeland
.
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instead
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Instead
, they can do the same business in their nation.
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, studies and dream
for
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of
good
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better
life
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 take many people to other
countries leaving
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countries, leaving
 their family and nation. In conclusion, people can go abroad for
their studies but,
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their studies, but
 they should return back. Governments
also
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 should encourage their mankind to
live
go away from a place
leave
 their
home
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 soil.
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