There is an increasing number of people who do not know their neighbor. What causes this situation? How to solve it? Give your own idea.

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In recent times, a lot of people have little knowledge of their
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
and those living in it.
This
is due to the rise in the
use
of electronic devices
such
as phones, computers and the internet, but
this
issue can be tackled by setting
time
limits on the
use
of these gadgets at home. Perhaps, the major reason for the increase in the number of people that
bearly
only a very short time before
barely
know their
neigbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
neighbour
is
overdependence
on electronic appliances and the internet. The advancements in
technology afford
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technology, afford
people the opportunity to watch television programs, subscribe for movies in the comfort of their homes, make friends online and regularly interact with them as well as like minds on the social media without being
concern
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concerned
about
happenings
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the happenings
in their immediate environments and those living in it.
For instance
, in many industrialized countries, both the grown ups and the youths are increasing
become
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becoming
less social because they depend more on online interactions compared to having face-to-face discussions.
As a result
, many people have little knowledge of
people
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the people
around them. Fortunately, a promising solution to
this
problem is to encourage individuals and families to reduce the
time
spent online and with electronic devices.
This
would afford people more
freetime
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free time
which can be
use
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used
to make friends with their
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
, regularly interact with them and maintain healthy relationships.
For example
, a recent study by Sociologist in Nigeria suggested that people would be more socially inclined if they reduce the
time
spent on their mobile phones, and
use
it to attend to social events around them.
Thus
, people would have more
time
to become familiar with their
neigbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
neighbour
. In conclusion,
overreliance
on the internet and
electonic
of or relating to electronics; concerned with or using devices that operate on principles governing the behavior of electrons
electronic
gadgets has increased the number of people who do not know people in their
neigborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
neighbourhoods
.
However
,
this
challenge can be solved by reducing the
time
spent online and on these devices.
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