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Things like puzzles, board games and pictures can contribute to a child’s development. What would you give a child to help him/her develop and why? Give details and examples in your explanation.

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Focusing on
child
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’s advancement is a major concern for parents.
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, parents try to facilitate their children with things
such
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 as puzzles, games, so that they can accelerate the brain development of the
child
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. Considering all the available options, puzzles are the best suitable option to
endure
make certain of
ensure
 growth of children, owing to
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 numerous benefits
such
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 as
mind
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 engrossment, problem solving skills, interest realization.
Although
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 board games and images have a huge role to play in childhood days, puzzles are quintessential for
child
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 growth, as they help in
mind
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 development and problem solving skills.
Firstly
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, as
puzzle
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 challenges children to produce a desired result,
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 helps them in utilizing grey matter of their brain,
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 better brain nourishment. To illustrate, children who have
interest
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an interest
 in puzzles, always perform better in studies, than their counterparts.
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, analytical
skills increases
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skills, increase
skills increase
 drastically when children engage their
mind
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 to produce a
desire
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desired
 output while playing quizzes. Another,
persuasive benefit
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the persuasive benefit
 of
mind
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 engaging puzzles is that it helps in constructing the interests of a
child
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. Not only children enjoy the pleasure of playing
mind
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 games, but
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also they start
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they also start
 displaying their liking and disliking. To elucidate, while playing with puzzles children demonstrate
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaving
 like they are not interested to solve a
puzzle
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 related to
police station
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the police station
a police station
, but they are interested to solve a
puzzle
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relate
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related
 to a hospital.
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,
this
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 can never ensure their future choice, but at least they start to develop a taste and individuality. Aforementioned points make puzzles highly considerable to help in building an intellectual individual, albeit other options are
also
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affective
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affected
. In conclusion, the most suitable present for a
child
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 could be any
mind
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 engaging
puzzle
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 which enhances their
creative
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creativity
 and logical skills.
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