Some people prefer to provide help or support directly to the local community. Others prefer to give money to national or international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give ur opinions?

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While in today life, there are several ways for wealthy people to contribute their

money

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to help to improve the life of

unprosperous

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people in the country. Some choose to buy essential items and give it directly to the community,

however

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, others prefer transferring their

money

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through

charity

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agencies. Both of these methods have negative and positive effects and I will be discussing it in

this

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essay. On the one hand, there are two main reasons that a large amount of people chooses to donate their

money

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charity

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organizations.

First

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of all, charitable institutions are fast, professional and they will make sure that people’s

money

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or items will be delivered to the exact people who really need it.

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, the processes are

also

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quite

straightforward so

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straightforward, so

people can transfer their

money

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with ease.

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, some people would like to donate anonymously and the

charity

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agencies can provide that.

On the other hand

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, it is

also

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advantageous to provide direct support to the community because

charity

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organizations are not always

trustable

Manageable; tractable; hence, moderate; not violent

treatable

. Few

charity

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institutions only transfer a part of the donation

money

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to the community and they kept the remain parts to their

own so

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own, so

handing the cash or items directly to people is a more efficient way.

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, in some provinces of Vietnam, most of the donation

money

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for the poor people often stayed in the pocket of

charity

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organizations

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organization's

organization

organizations'

leaders.

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, there are

also

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fraud agencies created to scam people’s

money

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and

then

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disappear without any traces.

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, not only the

money

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could not reach the hand of needy people, but the donator

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suffered from the loss of their

money

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. In conclusion, from my point of view, it is undeniable that

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charity

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charitable

agencies are fast and convenient,

however

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, direct donate is more reliable and safer for the donators.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

302 words

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Some people prefer to provide help or support directly to the local community. Others prefer to give money to national or international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give ur opinions?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The best way to motivate employees is to increase their salary. Do you agree with this statement? Are there other ways to encourage employees to work better?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development.

In the past it was only possible to contact people at home by letter or telephone. Nowadays, mobile devices mean that we can communicate with people anywhere and at any time. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The government should put a tax on unhealthy food to encourage people to have healthy life. Do you agree or disagree?

Should humans adapt to technology or should technology be adapted to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent?